I am writing a story and I have the first part done. COuld you guys give me some constructive critism? I am twelve and want to write so do you think they would let me puplish something?? Also dont let my age affect what you think of the story.
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"Jasper?" I called out from my hiding [...]
What do you think of my story? I haven’t edited it yet but this is just the preview thing and part of chapter 1. Please give constructive criticism.
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I got a knee brace (its pretty big, and has velcro straps). All week, I’ve been wearing it on the outside of my jeans or pants, but people are saying I’m supposed to wear it underneath my pants. But when I tried wearing it underneath, it would fall down easily, and it looks like my [...]
I sprained my knee, and the doctor told me to get a knee brace, so I got one of the black "ACE" ones. Do I wear it on my jeans, or on my bare skin?
Please tell me if you like this story… or if there are any improvements. I am not yet finished with it, but I would like some opinions. It was inspired by Twilight… but soon evolved into its own world. I will choose you for Best Answer if you give helpful advice!
“Roxy get your butt down [...]